A Mothers Hope

Pins and needles rip open For a brief moment physical agony, And happiness connect After that what she has given The world will swallow Endless fears Drying tears Wonder like a lost dog trapped in a storm Anxious like a soccer fan watching a penalty shoot out Hoping her inside was a world on its own © 2006, Lazola Belle ___________________________________________________________ Below is the revised version of the poem where I have try to shorten line 9 to see if it sounds better. Well I am still not sure, so please give me your opinion which one you like. Thanks Pins and needles rip open For a brief moment physical agony, And happiness connect After that what she has given The world will swallow Endless fears Drying tears Wonder like a lost dog trapped in a storm Anxious like a fan watching a shoot out Hoping her inside was a world on its own © 2006, Lazola Belle