Concubine revised

sitting here its as the world has left me the sounds keep me company lonely is so far off I would have to feel before i could truly say I was lonely there was a girl sweet innocent with dreams she had a light that shone so bright her ambitions were overshadowed by sex drugs, and alcohol a false light would emanate from her soul for a spilt second she felt alive but like eveytging els in her life it faded she was left numb she felt like a shell used breakable and unwanted. I STILL LOVE MY FIRST DRAFT BUT HERE IF YOU THINK I DONT KNOW WHAT "CONVENTIONAL " POETRY IS STICK THIS ONE UP UR WAZOO! TO EVERYONE THAT HAS BEEN TRULY HELFUL THIS REVISION IS DEDICATED TO YOU REA, GLEN, SINSIXX, AND AZURE WARRIOR!