Forever Intertwined

This is my first time writing a sonnet, critique is requested! I read Shakespere's "Shall I Compare Thee to A Summer's Day?" & wanted to try to write a sonnet..so I tried! Here's my best about my boyfriend for one month. It began on that calm day, August 6th You walked then through the black door of my heart. Still in my bed, I thought it was the 5th Quietlyopened, I ask who you are No words exchanged, two hearts beat as one You take my cold hand, leading me outside The frost melts away, now comes out the sun My soul warmed by your piercing lovely eyes You say today is the best you have had Too look in my eyes and touch my hand No tears or nightmares, nevermore sad We walk together as one, we will stand You are my Romeo, this I shall say Can I be your queen? your best prize in life? You tell me I'm silly and that today I'm more than a prize, I am your wife Together we are, 'til the end of time Forever one beat, Always intertwined -Taylor Madigan 9/16/09