Reckon

So this usually happens with my poetry: I'll have posted something and I keep revising it, working out little kinks and things that I think could be improved, and a few weeks later the piece will worth marking "revised". I've left the original version at the bottom just in case you wanted to compare revisions. Its mainly the 3rd stanza that's changed, though the 4th stanza also underwent some revisions. Hope you enjoy... (revision) Come entertain my deepest thoughts Five days engaged in lovers' knots While slipping off my shoes and socks She told me I should walk away. What words can I appropriate To reconcile mistrust in fate Yet still expand my heart's estate Within her walls of brick and clay? For love is like a lily's glow Which asks of death that it bestow Renewal in the seeds we sow That she receive her bride's bouquet And I can not unwind my smile When knowing that she is worthwhile Within a courtship free from guile If only she will let me stay… (original) Come entertain my deepest thoughts Five days engaged in lovers' knots While slipping off my shoes and socks She tells me I should walk away What words can I appropriate To reconcile mistrust in fate; Yet still expand my heart's estate Within her walls of brick and clay? If life will let her lilies grow I offer mine that death bestow Renewal in the seeds we sow That she receive her bride's bouquet For courtship must be free from guile And I can not unwind my smile When knowing that she is worthwhile If only she will let me stay...