the long breath

Intertwining, dual perceptions intersecting self reflection, Not defining, no exceptions! Never bound by misdirection Coming, going, yet, not moving, always staying in confusion Never slowing past illusions, merging fast my last delusion Transcendental moments crashing into moments of inaction Like two atoms smashing, flashing, chaos left in satisfaction Overgrowing mixed emotions, tears of lotion softly flowing Filling oceans of devotion to ideals worth never knowing Thoughts retreating then repeating, ruminating and defeating Restless breaths taunting, teasing every beat my heart keeps beating On the floor I fall now crawling on all fours, the walls are calling Barely moving, all comes crashing, now I’m crushed and bawling Forsaken yes! But not by death, taken down in such a mess A final thought and contemplation that I must confess Hear My Lord your sacrificed, shattered, tattered son of Life Cry to you and all the saints, what’s with all this strife! I admit to my temptations, times of lacking faith and patience Wasted moments, useless torments, yes I was a Sadist In my defense attempts were taken to refrain from pain and aching It’s just my flooding blood kept gushing and Lust was for the taking. alot of consonance here like ----rhyme sounds not letters/words.....and notice the interrhyming from the last part of a line rhyming with the first part of following line.....aa bb cc is good for longer lines....and notice in my poems i never overuse a rhyme or word tis just once....within lines i use interjections/prepositions like ----of, is, are, but the nouns are never overused.....Pronouns will be repeated as needed..... " I admit to my temptations, times of lacking faith and patience Wasted moments, useless torments, yes I was a Sadist " alot of t's its like alliteration but not necessarily first letter of evry word......consonance verbs are words of action they can dress up a noun like instead of "BLOOD" i have "FLOODING BLOOD"...even double verb/adverb placement like "OVERGROWING MIXED EMOTIONS" not just "EMOTIONS" and this poem works with trochees ( stress/unstress/stress/unstress.....keep in mind rhyming your stressed notes adds power and a roll......and two lines are running as a sentence not stop in flow or ceasura....... happy writing hope that helps